An editing pass over the words around the game

The hall, the guide, the rules page, the lobby and the report slip lose
most of their semicolons, the statement-colon lines and the guide
narrating itself. The tagline is one sentence, 'a labor of love' is gone
from the about link, and the shared parts read as Waving Hands' do.

Corrected along the way: the about panel no longer says players are shown
only what the rules let them see (nothing in hnefatafl is hidden); the
game was played for centuries before chess, not a thousand years; the
report slip's example no longer mentions points; and a watcher is no
longer told that "your defender" was taken. The move story reads "Ada
moved an attacker from d1 to d4" rather than "Ada: an attacker...".

The end-of-game reasons are unchanged: ledgers record them verbatim.

Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 5.5 <noreply@anthropic.com>
Claude-Session: https://claude.ai/code/session_0141G6xqLeNRYEtviLWSB5Up

src/lib/components/Hall.svelte

@@ -195,9 +195,9 @@
 <section class="lid">
 	<div class="lid-head">
 		<h1>Hnefatafl</h1>
-		<p class="pitch">The Viking board game. One king, one throne, four corners, and a ring of attackers closing in.</p>
-		<p class="tag">Hnefatafl was played across the Norse world for a thousand years before chess. Every piece moves like a rook and is taken by being sandwiched; the attackers must capture the king, the king must reach safety. Play a housecarl, or open a table for a friend and play by turns. Copenhagen rules on the big board, or Tablut, the older game Linnaeus wrote down in 1732.</p>
-		<p class="links"><a href="/guide">how to play</a> · <a href="/rules">the rules</a> · <a class="about-link" href="#about" onclick={() => (aboutOpen = true)}>about this game — a labor of love</a> · <button type="button" class="link" onclick={() => (prefsOpen = true)}>preferences</button></p>
+		<p class="pitch">The Viking board game of a king breaking for safety and a ring of attackers closing in.</p>
+		<p class="tag">Hnefatafl was played across the Norse world for centuries before chess arrived. Every piece moves like a rook and is taken by being caught between two enemies. The attackers must capture the king, and the king must reach safety. Play a housecarl, or open a table for a friend and play by turns, by Copenhagen rules on the big board or as Tablut, the older game Linnaeus wrote down in 1732.</p>
+		<p class="links"><a href="/guide">how to play</a> · <a href="/rules">the rules</a> · <a class="about-link" href="#about" onclick={() => (aboutOpen = true)}>about this game</a> · <button type="button" class="link" onclick={() => (prefsOpen = true)}>preferences</button></p>
 		<Preferences bind:open={prefsOpen} />
 	</div>
 
@@ -231,7 +231,7 @@
 				<button type="submit" class="quiet" disabled={!ready || code.trim().length < 4}>Join</button>
 			</form>
 		</div>
-		<p class="muted small">A code opens the door either way: take a seat if one is free, or watch from the Peanut Gallery.</p>
+		<p class="muted small">With a code you can take a seat if one is free, or watch from the Peanut Gallery.</p>
 		<form class="joinform" onsubmit={claim}>
 			<span class="or">or bring a seat from another device</span>
 			<input type="text" bind:value={phrase} placeholder="the four-word phrase" autocomplete="off" aria-label="transfer phrase" />
@@ -293,9 +293,9 @@
 	<!-- The about panel, a tab at a time: its sections are written here, in the game's own words. -->
 	{#snippet aboutGame()}
 		<div class="about-body">
-			<p>Hnefatafl is the tafl game of the Vikings, carried by them from Scandinavia to Britain, Ireland, Iceland and beyond, and played until chess arrived in the eleventh and twelfth centuries. No rules from that age survive; the game was reconstructed in modern times from a Sámi cousin, Tablut, whose rules the botanist Carl Linnaeus jotted down on his journey through Lapland in 1732.</p>
-			<p>This table plays Copenhagen, the modern tournament ruleset, on the eleven-by-eleven board, and Tablut on the nine-by-nine one, with the older board showing its age. The rules it follows are on the <a href="/rules">rules page</a>. The game is in the public domain; the board and pieces here are drawn, not borrowed.</p>
-			<p>It is free and keeps no accounts. A game between people lives on a small server as an append-only ledger of moves, so it can be replayed from its first move, and each player is shown only what the rules let them see.</p>
+			<p>Hnefatafl is the tafl game of the Vikings, carried by them from Scandinavia to Britain, Ireland, Iceland and beyond, and played until chess arrived in the eleventh and twelfth centuries. No rules from that age survive. The game was reconstructed in modern times from a Sámi cousin, Tablut, whose rules the botanist Carl Linnaeus jotted down on his journey through Lapland in 1732.</p>
+			<p>This table plays Copenhagen, the modern tournament ruleset, on the eleven-by-eleven board, and Tablut on the nine-by-nine one, with the older board showing its age. The rules it follows are on the <a href="/rules">rules page</a>. The game is in the public domain, and the board and pieces here were drawn for this site.</p>
+			<p>It is free and keeps no accounts. A game between people lives on a small server as an append-only ledger of moves, so it can be replayed from its first move.</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	{#snippet aboutTally()}
@@ -315,15 +315,15 @@
 				</ul>
 			{/if}
 			<p class="hosting">
-				The games of Kestrel's Hall are free and will stay free. They run on small servers that cost a few dollars a month; anyone who wants to chip in toward the hosting can at
-				<a href="https://ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest</a>. Nothing is unlocked by it and nothing is withheld without it.
+				The games of Kestrel's Hall are free and will stay free. They run on small servers that cost a few dollars a month, and anyone who wants to chip in toward the hosting can do so at
+				<a href="https://ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest</a>. Every game stays whole either way.
 			</p>
-			<p class="made">Hnefatafl belongs to everyone; it is a thousand years old.</p>
+			<p class="made">Hnefatafl belongs to everyone. It is more than a thousand years old.</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	{#snippet aboutWord()}
 		<div class="about-body">
-			<p>A rule read wrong, a bug, a game you would like to tell of: write to <a href="mailto:eric@ericwagoner.com">eric@ericwagoner.com</a>, <a href="https://bsky.app/profile/kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@kestrelsnest.social</a> on Bluesky, or <a href="https://toots.kestrelsnest.social/@eric" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@eric@toots.kestrelsnest.social</a> on Mastodon. The keeper of this hall roosts at <a href="https://kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">kestrelsnest.social</a>.</p>
+			<p>If a rule reads wrong, something breaks, or you have a game to tell of, write to <a href="mailto:eric@ericwagoner.com">eric@ericwagoner.com</a>, <a href="https://bsky.app/profile/kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@kestrelsnest.social</a> on Bluesky, or <a href="https://toots.kestrelsnest.social/@eric" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@eric@toots.kestrelsnest.social</a> on Mastodon. The keeper of this hall roosts at <a href="https://kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">kestrelsnest.social</a>.</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	<About bind:open={aboutOpen} title="About Hnefatafl" tabs={[{ id: 'game', label: 'The game', body: aboutGame }, { id: 'tally', label: 'The tally', body: aboutTally }, { id: 'family', label: 'More games', body: aboutFamily }, { id: 'word', label: 'Send word', body: aboutWord }]} />