Writing for players: the editing passes' lessons, and the template written by them
The conventions gain a list of the habits players read as generated text (a semicolon in every paragraph, statement-colon-explanation, "The" plus an abstract noun as a heading, clipped fragments in threes, closing aphorisms, "X, not Y", the page talking about itself), and of the errors that come from inherited text: hidden information where there is none, points where there are none, "both" at a larger table, unchecked claims, and ledger-stored words reworded. new-game.sh points at the list. The template follows it: the about link loses 'a labor of love', the tabs are Origins and Games so far, and the hall, lobby, room, report slip, table talk, guide and demo board read as Waving Hands' and Hnefatafl's now do. The landing page and family.json carry the two games' new taglines and lose their semicolons and the tip jar's aphorism. Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 5.5 <noreply@anthropic.com> Claude-Session: https://claude.ai/code/session_0141G6xqLeNRYEtviLWSB5Up
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<a href={`/join/${room.view.rematch.to}`}>Take your seat</a>
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{:else}
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<button type="button" class="quiet" disabled={rematching} onclick={rematch}>Rematch with this table</button>
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<span>the same company, at a new table; seats are held for everyone here.</span>
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<span>The same company sits down at a new table, with a seat held for everyone here.</span>
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{/if}
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</p>
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{/if}
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<section class="seat">
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<p class="eyebrow">room {roomId}</p>
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<h2>Take a seat</h2>
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<p>A player has opened this table and is gathering company. Choose a name and sit; the game begins when the host says.</p>
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<p>A player has opened this table and is gathering company. Choose a name and sit down. The game begins when the host says.</p>
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<form class="sit" onsubmit={takeSeat}>
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<label class="field">
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<span>Your name</span>
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