Writing for players: the editing passes' lessons, and the template written by them

The conventions gain a list of the habits players read as generated text
(a semicolon in every paragraph, statement-colon-explanation, "The" plus
an abstract noun as a heading, clipped fragments in threes, closing
aphorisms, "X, not Y", the page talking about itself), and of the errors
that come from inherited text: hidden information where there is none,
points where there are none, "both" at a larger table, unchecked claims,
and ledger-stored words reworded. new-game.sh points at the list.

The template follows it: the about link loses 'a labor of love', the
tabs are Origins and Games so far, and the hall, lobby, room, report
slip, table talk, guide and demo board read as Waving Hands' and
Hnefatafl's now do. The landing page and family.json carry the two
games' new taglines and lose their semicolons and the tip jar's aphorism.

Co-Authored-By: Claude Opus 5.5 <noreply@anthropic.com>
Claude-Session: https://claude.ai/code/session_0141G6xqLeNRYEtviLWSB5Up

template/src/lib/components/Hall.svelte

@@ -196,9 +196,9 @@
 <section class="lid" class:returning={active.length > 0}>
 	<div class="lid-head">
 		<h1>__NAME__</h1>
-		<p class="pitch">One line that says what the game is.</p>
+		<p class="pitch">One sentence that says what the game is, in its own world.</p>
 		<p class="tag">Two or three sentences for someone who has never heard of it: what you do on a turn, what makes it fun, and that it is free to play here against the bot or with friends.</p>
-		<p class="links"><a href="/guide">how to play</a> · <a href="/rules">the rules</a> · <a class="about-link" href="#about">about this game — a labor of love</a> · <button type="button" class="link" onclick={() => (prefsOpen = true)}>preferences</button></p>
+		<p class="links"><a href="/guide">how to play</a> · <a href="/rules">the rules</a> · <a class="about-link" href="#about">about this game</a> · <button type="button" class="link" onclick={() => (prefsOpen = true)}>preferences</button></p>
 		<Preferences bind:open={prefsOpen} />
 	</div>
 
@@ -232,7 +232,7 @@
 				<button type="submit" class="quiet" disabled={!ready || code.trim().length < 4}>Join</button>
 			</form>
 		</div>
-		<p class="muted small">A code opens the door either way: take a seat if one is free, or watch from the Peanut Gallery.</p>
+		<p class="muted small">With a code you can take a seat if one is free, or watch from the Peanut Gallery.</p>
 		<form class="joinform" onsubmit={claim}>
 			<span class="or">or bring a seat from another device</span>
 			<input type="text" bind:value={phrase} placeholder="the four-word phrase" autocomplete="off" aria-label="transfer phrase" />
@@ -309,7 +309,7 @@
 		<div class="about-body">
 			<p>Where the game comes from, who made the original and when, and how the keeper of this page first met it.</p>
 			<p>What this version keeps and what it changes. Where the rules text it follows lives (the <a href="/rules">rules page</a>), and any borrowed art or text with its notice.</p>
-			<p>It is free and keeps no accounts. A game between people lives on a small server as an append-only ledger of moves, so it can be replayed from its first move, and each player is shown only what the rules let them see.</p>
+			<p>It is free and keeps no accounts. A game between people lives on a small server as an append-only ledger of moves, so it can be replayed from its first move. Each player is shown only what the rules let them see (drop this sentence if nothing in the game is hidden).</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	{#snippet aboutTally()}
@@ -329,15 +329,15 @@
 				</ul>
 			{/if}
 			<p class="hosting">
-				The games of Kestrel's Hall are free and will stay free. They run on small servers that cost a few dollars a month; anyone who wants to chip in toward the hosting can at
-				<a href="https://ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest</a>. Nothing is unlocked by it and nothing is withheld without it.
+				The games of Kestrel's Hall are free and will stay free. They run on small servers that cost a few dollars a month, and anyone who wants to chip in toward the hosting can do so at
+				<a href="https://ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">ko-fi.com/kestrelsnest</a>. Every game stays whole either way.
 			</p>
 			<p class="made">__NAME__ is its designer's.</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	{#snippet aboutWord()}
 		<div class="about-body">
-			<p>A rule read wrong, a bug, a game you would like to tell of: write to <a href="mailto:eric@ericwagoner.com">eric@ericwagoner.com</a>, <a href="https://bsky.app/profile/kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@kestrelsnest.social</a> on Bluesky, or <a href="https://toots.kestrelsnest.social/@eric" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@eric@toots.kestrelsnest.social</a> on Mastodon. The keeper of this hall roosts at <a href="https://kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">kestrelsnest.social</a>.</p>
+			<p>If a rule reads wrong, something breaks, or you have a game to tell of, write to <a href="mailto:eric@ericwagoner.com">eric@ericwagoner.com</a>, <a href="https://bsky.app/profile/kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@kestrelsnest.social</a> on Bluesky, or <a href="https://toots.kestrelsnest.social/@eric" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">@eric@toots.kestrelsnest.social</a> on Mastodon. The keeper of this hall roosts at <a href="https://kestrelsnest.social" target="_blank" rel="noreferrer">kestrelsnest.social</a>.</p>
 		</div>
 	{/snippet}
 	<TabbedDialog
@@ -346,8 +346,8 @@
 		title="About __NAME__"
 		label="About this game"
 		tabs={[
-			{ id: 'game', label: 'The game', body: aboutGame },
-			{ id: 'tally', label: 'The tally', body: aboutTally },
+			{ id: 'game', label: 'Origins', body: aboutGame },
+			{ id: 'tally', label: 'Games so far', body: aboutTally },
 			{ id: 'family', label: 'More games', body: aboutFamily },
 			{ id: 'word', label: 'Send word', body: aboutWord }
 		]}